Editorial cleanup of sections 6 and 7.
authorManu Sporny <msporny@digitalbazaar.com>
Fri, 27 Mar 2015 23:52:01 -0400
changeset 97 c956716edbed
parent 96 ea399d503f7e
child 98 80b220fe1623
Editorial cleanup of sections 6 and 7.
latest/use-cases/index.html
--- a/latest/use-cases/index.html	Thu Mar 26 22:51:36 2015 -0400
+++ b/latest/use-cases/index.html	Fri Mar 27 23:52:01 2015 -0400
@@ -688,6 +688,13 @@
   <section>
     <h2 id="phases-detail">The Phases of a Payment in Detail</h2>
 
+    <p>
+This section examines the phases of payment, and the steps involved in each
+phase, through a variety of use cases. The purpose of this section is to
+elaborate on the variety of scenarios present in each step of the payment
+process.
+    </p>
+
     <section>
       <h3>Negotiation of Payment Terms</h3>
       <p>
@@ -730,7 +737,8 @@
           </dd>
           <dt>Privacy</dt>
           <dd>
-Cory shouldn't be able to be tracked unless he uses a loyalty card to pay.
+Cory shouldn't be able to be tracked by the merchant unless he uses a loyalty
+card to pay.
           </dd>
         </dl>
 
@@ -821,8 +829,10 @@
             </dd>
             <dt>Exceptions</dt>
             <dd>
-Software acting on the<tref title="payer">payer's</tref> behalf may keep track exactly how much money the <tref>payer</tref> has and not allow them to
-process the offer.</dd>
+Software acting on the <tref title="payer">payer's</tref> behalf may keep
+track of exactly how much money the <tref>payer</tref> has and not allow them to
+process the offer.
+            </dd>
           </dl>
 
           <dl class="dl-horizontal">
@@ -842,7 +852,7 @@
             <dd>
 Some offers are not aware of the final price but would rather set limits on
 the amount of the purchase before a particular metered good or service is
-delivered. Is this a duplicate of 'Hold offers'?
+delivered.
             </dd>
             <dt>Privacy</dt>
             <dd>
@@ -1149,7 +1159,7 @@
           </dd>
           <dt>Goals</dt>
           <dd>
-Automatability, and Portability,
+Automatability and Portability.
           </dd>
           <dt>Motivation</dt>
           <dd>
@@ -1167,7 +1177,7 @@
           </dd>
           <dt>Goals</dt>
           <dd>
-Improved user experience, and Portability,
+Improved user experience and Portability.
           </dd>
           <dt>Motivation</dt>
           <dd>
@@ -1301,7 +1311,7 @@
               <li>
 Marie has credit cards from three different institutions:
 one for work (from BankA), one personal card (from BankB), and one retail card
-from PayCo. She wants to choose the right one depending on the context of her
+(from PayCo). She wants to choose the right one depending on the context of her
 purchase.
               </li>
               <li>
@@ -1320,7 +1330,8 @@
               <li>
 David wants to be able to manually order available payment instruments
 when they are presented to him.
-<span class="issue">Why? Isn't this just a part of the wallet UI?</span>
+<span class="issue">Why does this need to be standardized?
+Isn't this just a part of the wallet UI?</span>
               </li>
             </ul>
           </dd>
@@ -1516,8 +1527,8 @@
           <dd>
             <ul>
               <li>
-Richard's choses to pay using a credit card at FlowerFriends. FlowerFriends
-initiates payment processing using their payment processor to contacting the
+Richard choses to pay using a credit card at FlowerFriends. FlowerFriends
+initiates payment processing using their payment processor to contact the
 acquiring bank that handles credit card payments for FlowerFriends.
               </li>
               <li>
@@ -1623,7 +1634,7 @@
             </dd>
             <dt>Goals</dt>
             <dd>
-Greater security, and Transparency.
+Greater security and Transparency.
             </dd>
             <dt>Motivation</dt>
             <dd>
@@ -1881,7 +1892,8 @@
           </dd>
           <dt>Privacy / Security</dt>
           <dd>
-Physical receipts should ensure that private information is not
+Physical receipts should ensure that private information is not exposed on
+the receipt.
           </dd>
           <dt>Accessibility</dt>
           <dd>
@@ -2052,7 +2064,7 @@
 
       <p>
 <strong>Delivery of Product</strong>: AlpacaToesCo ships the package of socks
-to Lenne and she recieves them the next day.
+to Lenne and she receives them the next day.
       </p>
     </section>