Last few editorial fixups pre-FPWD.
authorManu Sporny <msporny@digitalbazaar.com>
Sat, 11 Apr 2015 17:46:12 -0400
changeset 193 d1de2205f701
parent 192 e66893d6b302
child 194 d11939b8315f
Last few editorial fixups pre-FPWD.
WD/use-cases/2015-04-16/Overview.html
--- a/WD/use-cases/2015-04-16/Overview.html	Sat Apr 11 17:40:26 2015 -0400
+++ b/WD/use-cases/2015-04-16/Overview.html	Sat Apr 11 17:46:12 2015 -0400
@@ -449,10 +449,12 @@
 
     <p>
 The <abbr title="World Wide Web Consortium">W3C</abbr> Web Payments Interest Group is developing a roadmap for standards to
-improve the interoperability of payments on the Web. This will help achieve
+improve the interoperability of payments using Web technologies for both
+online and brick-and-mortar (offline) scenarios. This will help achieve
 greater interoperability among merchants and their customers,
-payment providers, software vendors, mobile operators, and payment networks.
-The roadmap will include <a title="payment scheme" href="#dfn-payment-scheme" class="internalDFN">payment schemes</a> in use
+payment providers, software vendors, mobile operators, native mobile
+apps, and payment networks. The roadmap will include
+<a title="payment scheme" href="#dfn-payment-scheme" class="internalDFN">payment schemes</a> in use
 today (such as electronic cheques, credit cards, direct debit, and
 cryptocurrencies) and those of the future. The roadmap will be derived from
 the use cases listed below.
@@ -1668,10 +1670,9 @@
           </dd>
           <dt>Motivation</dt>
           <dd>
-A <a href="#dfn-payer" class="internalDFN">payer</a> will most likely use multiple payment services over
-time. It is important to ensure that the payment services presented
-to them are consistent across devices, even ones that they have never used
-before.
+A <a href="#dfn-payer" class="internalDFN">payer</a> will most likely use multiple digital wallets over time. It is
+important to ensure that the wallets that they use are presented to them in a
+consistent manner across devices.
           </dd>
           <dt>Privacy / Security</dt>
           <dd>
@@ -1854,7 +1855,7 @@
           </dd>
           <dt>Accessibility</dt>
           <dd>Not everyone can provide fingerprints or detailed iris scans.
-	    Therefore, it is important to offer multiple forms
+	    Therefore, it is important to offer multiple forms of
 	    biometric verification to improve accessibility.
           </dd>
         </dl>