--- a/ontology/prov-o-html-sections/description-starting-points.inc.html	Sun Nov 25 00:31:13 2012 +0000
+++ b/ontology/prov-o-html-sections/description-starting-points.inc.html	Sun Nov 25 11:57:51 2012 -0500
@@ -18,24 +18,30 @@
       and during their lifespan can  <strong>use</strong> and <strong>generate</strong> a variety of Entities (described with 
       <a href='#used' class="qname">prov:used</a> and <a href='#wasGeneratedBy' class="qname">prov:wasGeneratedBy</a>, respectively). 
       For example, a blog writing activity may use a particular dataset and generate a bar chart. 
-      By applying usage and generation, one can construct provenance chains comprising both Activities and Entities.
+      By expressing usage and generation, one can construct provenance chains comprising both Activities and Entities.
       </p>
 
       <p>In addition, we can say that an Activity <a href='#wasInformedBy' class="qname">prov:wasInformedBy</a>
       another Activity to provide some dependency information without explicitly providing the activities' start and end times. 
       A <span class="repeated">prov:wasInformedBy</span> relation between Activities suggests that the informed Activity used an Entity that was generated by the informing 
-      Activity, but the Entity itself is not interesting or is unknown. 
-      So, the <span class="repeated">prov:wasInformedBy</span> property allows the assertion of provenance chains comprising only Activities.
+      Activity, but the Entity itself is unknown or is not of interest. 
+      So, the <span class="repeated">prov:wasInformedBy</span> property allows the construction of provenance chains comprising only Activities.
       </p>
 
       <p>Provenance chains comprising only Entities can be formed using the <a href='#wasDerivedFrom' class="qname">prov:wasDerivedFrom</a> property.
-         A derivation is a transformation of one entity into another. For example, if the Activity that created the bar chart is not interesting or is unknown,
+         A derivation is a transformation of one entity into another. For example, if the Activity that created the bar chart is not known or is not of interest,
           then we can say that the bar chart <span class="repeated">prov:wasDerivedFrom</span> the dataset.
-         Arbitrary RDF properties can be used to describe the fixed aspects of an Entity that are interesting to a particular application (for example, 
+         Arbitrary RDF properties can be used to describe the fixed aspects of an Entity that are interesting within a particular application (for example, 
          the file size and format of the dataset, or the aspect ratio of the bar chart).
       </p>
 
-      <p>An Agent can be responsible for an Activity or an Entity, which is described using the properties <a href='#wasAssociatedWith' class="qname">prov:wasAssociatedWith</a> and <a href='#wasAttributedTo' class="qname">prov:wasAttributedTo</a>, respectively. Agents can also be responsible for other Agents' actions. In this case, the Agent that influenced an Activity or Entity <a href='#actedOnBehalfOf' class="qname">prov:actedOnBehalfOf</a> another Agent that also bears some responsibility for the resulting Activity or Entity.
+      <p>While the properties <span class="repeated">prov:used</span>, <span class="repeated">prov:wasGeneratedBy</span>, 
+         <span class="repeated">prov:wasInformedBy</span>, and <span class="repeated">prov:wasDerivedFrom</span> can be used to construct provenance chains among 
+         Activities and Entities, Agents may be ascribed responibility for any Activity or an Entity within a provenance chain. 
+         An Agent's responsibility for an Activity or Entity is described using the properties <a href='#wasAssociatedWith' class="qname">prov:wasAssociatedWith</a> and 
+         <a href='#wasAttributedTo' class="qname">prov:wasAttributedTo</a>, respectively. 
+         Agents can also be responsible for other Agents' actions. In this case, the Agent that influenced an Activity or Entity <a href='#actedOnBehalfOf' class="qname">prov:actedOnBehalfOf</a> 
+         another Agent that also bears some responsibility for the resulting Activity or Entity.
 
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