--- a/ontology/prov-o-html-sections/description-starting-points.inc.html	Mon Jul 02 22:06:55 2012 -0400
+++ b/ontology/prov-o-html-sections/description-starting-points.inc.html	Mon Jul 02 22:11:31 2012 -0400
@@ -24,16 +24,16 @@
       <p>In addiition, we can say that an Activity <a href='#wasInformedBy' class="qname">prov:wasInformedBy</a>
       another Activity to provide some ordering information without explicitly mentioning the activities' start and end times. 
       A <span class="repeated">prov:wasInformedBy</span> relation between Activities suggests that the informed Activity used an Entity that was generated by the informing 
-      Activity, but the Entity is itself is not interesting. So, the <span class="repeated">prov:wasInformedBy</span> property allows the assertion of provenance chains comprising only Activities.
+      Activity, but the Entity itself is not interesting. So, the <span class="repeated">prov:wasInformedBy</span> property allows the assertion of provenance chains comprising only Activities.
       </p>
 
       <p>The <a href='#wasDerivedFrom' class="qname">prov:wasDerivedFrom</a> property can be used to form provenance chains of only Entities.
          A derivation is a transformation of one entity into another. For example, if the Activity that created the bar chart is not interesting,
           the we can say that the bar chart <span class="repeated">prov:wasDerivedFrom</span> the dataset. Arbitrary RDF properties can be used to describe the 
-         fixed aspects of an Entity that are interesting to a particular application.
+         fixed aspects of an Entity that are interesting to a particular application (for example, the file size and format of the dataset, or the aspect ratio of the bar chart).
       </p>
 
-      <p>An Agent can be responsible for an Activity or an Entity (described using the properties <a href='#wasAssociatedWith' class="qname">prov:wasAssociatedWith</a> and <a href='#wasAttributedTo' class="qname">prov:wasAttributedTo</a>, respectively). Agents can also be responsible for other Agents' actions. In this case, the Agent involved with an Activity or Entity <a href='#actedOnBehalfOf' class="qname">prov:actedOnBehalfOf</a> another Agent that may have been less involved, but still bears some responnsibility for the Activity or Entity.
+      <p>An Agent can be responsible for an Activity or an Entity, which is described using the properties <a href='#wasAssociatedWith' class="qname">prov:wasAssociatedWith</a> and <a href='#wasAttributedTo' class="qname">prov:wasAttributedTo</a>, respectively. Agents can also be responsible for other Agents' actions. In this case, the Agent that influenced an Activity or Entity <a href='#actedOnBehalfOf' class="qname">prov:actedOnBehalfOf</a> another Agent that may have had less influence, but still bears some responnsibility for the resulting Activity or Entity.
 
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