--- a/model/ProvenanceModel.html	Tue Jan 17 14:37:32 2012 +0000
+++ b/model/ProvenanceModel.html	Tue Jan 17 14:44:12 2012 +0000
@@ -1991,30 +1991,30 @@
 
 <div class="note">This section is currently under revision and in flux</div>
 
-The purpose of the record types defined in this section is to establish a relationship between two entity records, which asserts that the two records provide a different characterization of the same entity.  Consider for example three entity records:
+The purpose of the record types defined in this section is to establish a relationship between two entitues, which asserts that they provide a different characterization of the same thing.  Consider for example three entities:
 <ul>
 
-  <li><span class="name">e1</span> describing "Bob, the holder of facebook account ABC",
+  <li><span class="name">e1</span> denoting "Bob, the holder of facebook account ABC",
   
-  <li><span class="name">e2</span> describing "Bob, the holder of twitter account XYZ",
-
-  <li><span class="name">e3</span> describing "Bob, the person".
+  <li><span class="name">e2</span> denoting "Bob, the holder of twitter account XYZ",
+
+  <li><span class="name">e3</span> denoting "Bob, the person".
 </ul>
 
-One may make several assertions to establish that these entity records refer to the same the real-world characterized thing Bob, either in different contexts, or at different levels of abstraction. For example:
+One may make several assertions to establish that these entities refer to the same the real-world thing Bob, either in different contexts, or at different levels of abstraction. For example:
 
 <ol>
-  <li> Each of <span class="name">e1</span> , <span class="name">e2</span> provide a <em>more concrete</em> characterization of Bob  than <span class="name">e3</span> does
-
-  <li>  <span class="name">e1</span> and  <span class="name">e2</span> provide two different characterizations of the same entity.
+  <li> Entity denoted by <span class="name">e1</span> provides a <em>more concrete</em> characterization of Bob  than <span class="name">e3</span> does;
+  <li> Entity denoted by <span class="name">e2</span>  provides a <em>more concrete</em> characterization of Bob  than <span class="name">e3</span> does;
+  <li> The entities denoted by <span class="name">e1</span> and  <span class="name">e2</span> provide two different characterizations of the same thing.
 </ol>
 
 Two relations are introduced to express these assertions:
 
 <ul>
 
-  <li> B is a <em>specialization</em> of A, written <span class="name">specializationOf(B,A)</span> captures the intent of assertion (1);
-  <li> B is an <em>alternative characterization</em> of A, written <span class="name">alternateOf(B,A)</span> captures the intent of assertion (2).
+  <li> B is a <em>specialization</em> of A, written <span class="name">specializationOf(B,A)</span> captures the intent of assertion (1) and (2);
+  <li> B is an <em>alternative characterization</em> of A, written <span class="name">alternateOf(B,A)</span> captures the intent of assertion (3).
   
   </ul>