--- a/model/comments/wd6-Graham.txt	Tue May 29 12:33:39 2012 +0100
+++ b/model/comments/wd6-Graham.txt	Tue May 29 13:57:16 2012 +0100
@@ -326,7 +326,21 @@
   > designed in Japan> ]]
   > 
 
-Yes.
+After adding this example, I removed it since I am not sure it works.
+
+activity(ex:purchasing)
+activity(ex:designing)
+wasGeneratedBy(ex:design, ex:designing)
+wasDerivedFrom(ex:car,ex:design)
+wasDerivedFrom(ex:carInShowRoom, ex:car)
+used(ex:purchasing, ex:carInShowRoom)
+
+
+
+<!-- The activity of purchasing a
+ car in Boston can be informed by the the activity of its being
+ designed in Japan.-->
+
 
   > 
   > == After section 2.1.1 ==
@@ -601,7 +615,7 @@
   > 
   > I'd still like to see derivations immediately follow entities/activities.  :)
 
-I swapped component 2 and 3.
+I swapped components 2 and 3.
 
   > 
   > Figure 4: I don't know what this is trying to tell me.
@@ -609,22 +623,40 @@
   > What is the significance of vertical stacking and/or horizontal alignment.
   > 
   > Figure 5: uses UML, but at one point I was looking for cardinality indicators (1:1, 1:N, N:M, etc.)
+
+Paolo, can you tell me what to add? where? What's the UML default?
+
+
   > 
   > == Section 5.1.1 ==
   > 
   > Definition of entity seems a bit clumsy, but not problematic.
+
+Was agreed by WG.
+No change here.
+
   > 
   > == Section 5.1.2 ==
   > 
   > An activity may be "... associated ..." with an entity?  Seems like an
   > unfortunate overloading of terminology.  Suggest drop "being
   > associated with" ... it's not trying to be an exhaustive list.
+
+There was no overloading, that's the same association.
+However, agreed, it doesn't have to be exhaustive. I dropped it.
+
   > 
   > "An activity is not an entity" - I think you said otherwise further up (see previous email).
   > 
+
+Not to my knowledge. It was about agent.
+
   > == Section 5.1.3 ==
   > 
   > "This entity did not exist before..." jarred a little for me.  I'd suggest "was not available for use before ..."
+
+What's the problem with this? The sentence already say "becomes available for usage ..."
+
   > 
   > == Section 5.1.4 ==
   > 
@@ -636,6 +668,13 @@
   > "/Communication/ is the exchange of information by two activities, in
   > the form of an unspecified entity, one activity using information
   > generated by the other"
+
+The exchanged entity may not be digital.
+
+I updated the definition as follows
+
+"Communication is the exchange of an UNSPECIFIED entity by two activities, one activity using SOME entity generated by the other."
+
   > 
   > As I recall, this assertion implies the existence of an entity or
   > entity-derivation-entity chain from one to the other.  Hmmm... Is the
@@ -643,6 +682,8 @@
   > activity to the other, rather than possibly indirectly via intervening
   > activities?  The phrasing suggests this, but the example not so much
   > (what bureaucratic process could be so simple?).
+
+
   > 
   > == Section 5.1.6 ==
   > 

--- a/model/glossary.html	Tue May 29 12:33:39 2012 +0100
+++ b/model/glossary.html	Tue May 29 13:57:16 2012 +0100
@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@
 <span class="glossary" id="glossary-activity">  
 An <dfn id="concept-activity">activity</dfn>
  is something that occurs over a period of time and acts upon or with entities; 
-it may include consuming, processing, transforming, modifying, relocating, using, generating, or being associated with entities. 
+it may include consuming, processing, transforming, modifying, relocating, using, or generating entities. 
 </span>
 
 <span class="glossary" id="glossary-agent">  
@@ -154,7 +154,7 @@
 </span>
 
 <span class="glossary" id="glossary-communication">  
-<dfn id="concept-communication">Communication</dfn> is the exchange of an entity by two activities, one activity using the entity generated by the other.
+<dfn id="concept-communication">Communication</dfn> is the exchange of an unspecified entity by two activities, one activity using some entity generated by the other.
 </span>
 
 

--- a/model/glossary.js	Tue May 29 12:33:39 2012 +0100
+++ b/model/glossary.js	Tue May 29 13:57:16 2012 +0100
@@ -3,7 +3,7 @@
 //  with <script src="glossary.js" class="remove"></script>
 //Insert glossary definitions with the following 
 // <div class="glossary-ref" ref="glossary-generation"></div>
-glossary_hg='http://dvcs.w3.org/hg/prov/file/3cc96f394c1c/model/glossary.html';
+glossary_hg='http://dvcs.w3.org/hg/prov/file/51c1fe338db9/model/glossary.html';
 glossary_string= 
 ' ' + 
 '<html> ' + 
@@ -15,7 +15,7 @@
 '<span class="glossary" id="glossary-activity">   ' + 
 'An <dfn id="concept-activity">activity</dfn> ' + 
 ' is something that occurs over a period of time and acts upon or with entities;  ' + 
-'it may include consuming, processing, transforming, modifying, relocating, using, generating, or being associated with entities.  ' + 
+'it may include consuming, processing, transforming, modifying, relocating, using, or generating entities.  ' + 
 '</span> ' + 
 ' ' + 
 '<span class="glossary" id="glossary-agent">   ' + 
@@ -161,7 +161,7 @@
 '</span> ' + 
 ' ' + 
 '<span class="glossary" id="glossary-communication">   ' + 
-'<dfn id="concept-communication">Communication</dfn> is the exchange of an entity by two activities, one activity using the entity generated by the other. ' + 
+'<dfn id="concept-communication">Communication</dfn> is the exchange of an unspecified entity by two activities, one activity using some entity generated by the other. ' + 
 '</span> ' + 
 ' ' + 
 ' ' + 

--- a/model/prov-dm.html	Tue May 29 12:33:39 2012 +0100
+++ b/model/prov-dm.html	Tue May 29 13:57:16 2012 +0100
@@ -695,9 +695,6 @@
 <p>
 The activity of writing a celebrity article was informed by (a
 communication instance) the activity of intercepting voicemails.
- The activity of purchasing a
- car in Boston can be informed by the the activity of its being
- designed in Japan.
 </div>