--- a/model/comments/wd6-Graham.txt Mon May 28 17:13:53 2012 +0100
+++ b/model/comments/wd6-Graham.txt Mon May 28 17:30:44 2012 +0100
@@ -19,6 +19,9 @@
> later in the document I see no point in also including them in section
> 2. So my proposals focus more on explaining how the concepts work
> together and not repeating the actual definitions.
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> As I reflect on what I've read, I think it might be worth linking each
> of the core structure concepts to the corresponding subsection in
@@ -68,9 +71,18 @@
> have used - OPM, OPMV, Provenir, PML all use broadly similar
> structures)
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+Goof point, we should cite http://www.w3.org/2005/Incubator/prov/wiki/Provenance_Vocabulary_Mappings
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> Para 4 and list: I would have the derivations component immediately
> follow on from entities and activities (or folded in with those).
> More detail later in discussion of core structures.
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+I personally would prefer to see
+ component 2: derivation
+ component 3: agent/responsibility.
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> Para 5 and 6: I think these should be run together. I find that para
> 5 on its own doesn't convey anything useful. I would suggest even
@@ -122,6 +134,9 @@
> table (Table 2): relations on the diagram use values from the "Name"
> column of the table, but types use values from the "Concepts" column.
>
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+I am aware of this. Not sure how to address this.
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> I think it's a little confusing that there are named "concepts" and
> (sometimes) different names for the types and relations. This is
> behind my earlier comment suggesting that table 2 be moved top later
@@ -131,6 +146,9 @@
> in the rest of section 2, then those names can also be used to locate
> the corresponding sections in the reference part of the document. In
> this arrangement, I think table 2 is redundant.
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> == Section 2.1.1 ==