--- a/longdesc1/longdesc.html	Fri Dec 13 17:06:29 2013 -0500
+++ b/longdesc1/longdesc.html	Fri Dec 13 17:25:36 2013 -0500
@@ -637,9 +637,9 @@
             document, authors can consult e.g. [<a href="#bib-WCAG2">WCAG</a>].</p>
         </div>
         <h4 id="authors">3.0.2 Authors</h4>
-        <p>Authors <em class="rfc2119">should</em> put descriptions within an
-          element which is the target of a fragment link (e.g. <code>longdesc="example.html#description"</code>)
-          if a description is only part of the target document. </p>
+        <p>When a description is only part of the target document, authors 
+          <em class="rfc2119">should</em> link to a fragment link in the target document  
+          (e.g. <code>longdesc="example.html#description"</code>).</p>
         <div class="note">
           <p><em>This section is not normative</em></p>
           <p>Best practices for full descriptions of images are beyond the scope