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 <h2>Model the Data</h2>
 
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-It is not within scope of this document to expand on the process of Linked Open Data modeling however, we highlight how Linked Data  differs from the traditional relational data modeling approach.  
+It is not within scope of this document to treat Linked Open Data modeling comprehensively however, we highlight how Linked Data  differs from the traditional relational data modeling approach and describe who should be involved as guidance.
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 <h3>Participants in the Modeling Process</h3>
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-The modeling process for Linked Data requires participants who represent a range of concerns including the existing data workflow and policies.  It is helpful to include one or more individuals who are familiar with the existing dataset(s) which is in many cases is some form of data extract from one or more systems.  This person is typically a relational database administrator (DBA) or responsible for the program and/or application.  Ideally, a Linked Data subject matter expert will facilitate the Linked Data modeling process, helping to make <i>implicit</i> relationships <i>explicit</i> using Linked Data principles.
+The modeling process for Linked Data requires participants who represent a range of concerns including one or more people familiar with the existing data workflow and data policies.  It is helpful to include a database administrator (DBA) and/or someone responsible for data collection.  Ideally, a Linked Data subject matter expert will help facilitate the Linked Data modeling process.  Their role is to help explain both the similarities, differences and benefits of a Linked Data approach.  
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-<h3>The Differences</h3>
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-Generally, all data modeling requires an understanding of the category of database being used, for example relational or NoSQL.  RDF databases are one of the many types of NoSQL databases and the only type based on an international family of standards.[[DWOOD2013]] Linked Data uses RDF as its data model because RDF is the international standard for representing data on the Web.  It is built on well-established and widely deployed standards including <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#http-uris">HTTP URIs</a>.  Thus, one important difference between relational databases versus Linked Data is in the use of international standards for data interchange (e.g., <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#rdfa">RDFa</a>, <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#json-ld">, <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#turtle">Turtle</a> and <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#rdf-xml">RDF/XML</a>) and <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#sparql">SPARQL</a> for query.
+In general, data modeling requires an understanding of the category of database being used, for example relational or NoSQL.  An <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#rdf-database"> RDF database</a> is a type of NoSQL database and the only type based on an international family of standards.[[DWOOD2013]] Linked Data uses RDF as its data model because RDF is the international standard for representing data on the Web.  RDF databases are built on well-established and widely deployed standards including <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#http-uris">HTTP URIs</a>.  Thus, one important difference between relational databases versus Linked Data is in the use of international standards for data interchange (e.g., <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#rdfa">RDFa</a>, <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#json-ld">, <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#turtle">Turtle</a> and <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#rdf-xml">RDF/XML</a>) and <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/ld-glossary/#sparql">SPARQL</a> for query.
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