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@@ -25,7 +25,7 @@
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       <h1 class="title" id="title">Recommendation Track Process, draft proposal</h1>
       <h2 id="w3c-working-draft-20-september-2012"><abbr title="World Wide Web Consortium"></abbr>Editors'
-        Draft 23 September 2013</h2>
+        Draft 3 October 2013</h2>
       <dl>
         <!--dt>Latest published version:</dt>
         <dd><a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/HTML-longdesc">http://www.w3.org/TR/HTML-longdesc</a></dd-->
@@ -75,7 +75,7 @@
           Recommendation-track document. </p>
         <p>Please send comments on this document to, or participate in, the <a
             href="http://www.w3.org/community/w3process/">W3C Process Community
-            Group</a>. Issues related to this proposal are tracked in that
+            Group</a>. Issues related to this proposal are recorded in that
           group's issue tracker using the product "<a href="https://www.w3.org/community/w3process/track/products/1">Document
             Lifecycle (chapter 7)</a>"</p>
         Major changes:
@@ -94,7 +94,7 @@
             recommendation, and ends 4 weeks after the Working group has
             provisional approval for a Request to publish as a W3C
             Recommendation.</li>
-          <li>The director is required to address AC review comments <strong>publicly</strong>,
+          <li>The Director is required to address AC review comments <strong>publicly</strong>,
             2 weeks <em>before</em> publication of a Recommendation.</li>
           <li>And it is in HTML5</li>
         </ul>
@@ -386,7 +386,7 @@
       considered positive evidence of wide review. A recommended practice is
       making a specific announcement to other W3C Working Groups as well as the
       general public that a group proposes to enter Last Call Candidate
-      Recommendation in e.g. approximately four weeks, . By contrast a generic
+      Recommendation in e.g. approximately four weeks. By contrast a generic
       statement in a document requesting review at any time is likely not to be
       considered as sufficient evidence that the group has solicited wide
       review. </p>
@@ -441,14 +441,14 @@
     </ol>
     <p>W3C <em class="rfc2119">may</em> <a href="#tr-end">end work on a
         technical report</a> at any time.</p>
-    <p>The director <em class="rfc2119">may</em> refuse permission to advance
+    <p>The Director <em class="rfc2119">may</em> decline a request to advance
       in maturity level, requiring a Working Group to conduct further work, and
       <em class="rfc2119">may</em> require the specification to return to a
       lower <a href="#maturity-level">maturity level</a>. The Director <em class="rfc2119">must</em>
       <span class="from">(was in 7.4.6)</span> inform the <a href="http://www.w3.org/2005/10/Process-20051014/organization.html#AC">Advisory
-        Committee</a> and group Chairs when a technical report has been refused
-      permission to advance in maturity level and returned to a Working Group
-      for further work.</p>
+        Committee</a> and Working Group Chairs when a Working Group's request
+      for a specification to advance in maturity level is declined and and the
+      specification is returned to a Working Group for further work.</p>
     <h4 id="working-draft">7.4.1 Working Draft</h4>
     <h5>7.4.1.a <a name="first-wd" id="first-wd">First Public Working Draft</a></h5>
     <h4> </h4>
@@ -469,12 +469,12 @@
       per <a href="http://www.w3.org/Consortium/Patent-Policy/#sec-Exclusion">section
         4</a> of the <a href="http://www.w3.org/Consortium/Patent-Policy">W3C
         Patent Policy</a> [<a href="http://www.w3.org/2005/10/Process-20051014/refs.html#ref-patentpolicy">PUB33</a>].</p>
-    <p class="new">A working group <em class="rfc2119">should</em> publish a
+    <h5 id="revised-wd">7.4.1b Revised Public Working Drafts</h5>
+    <p class="new">A Working Group <em class="rfc2119">should</em> publish a
       Working Draft to the W3C Technical Reports page every 6 months, or sooner
       when there have been significant changes to the document that would
-      benefit from review from beyond the Working Group<em class="rfc2119"></em>.<span
-        class="from">(was must in @@ch4?)</span> </p>
-    <h5 id="revised-wd">7.4.1b Revised Public Working Drafts</h5>
+      benefit from review from beyond the Working Group<em class="rfc2119"></em>.
+    </p>
     <p>To publish a revised Working draft, a Working Group <span class="from">(copied
         since this is not a new maturity level)</span> </p>
     <ul>
@@ -622,7 +622,7 @@
       as a W3C Recommendation. <span class="from">(was 7.4.4)</span> </p>
     <p>If there was any <a href="http://www.w3.org/2005/10/Process-20051014/policies.html#def-Dissent"
         rel="glossary" title="Definition of Dissent"><span class="dfn-instance">dissent</span></a>
-      in Advisory Committee reviews, the director <span class="new"><em class="rfc2119">must</em>
+      in Advisory Committee reviews, the Director <span class="new"><em class="rfc2119">must</em>
         publish the substantive content of the dissent to W3C and the general
         public</span> and <em class="rfc2119">must</em> <a href="http://www.w3.org/2005/10/Process-20051014/policies.html#formal-address">formally
         address</a> the comment <span class="new">at least 14 days before
@@ -753,7 +753,7 @@
       and in particular <a href="http://www.w3.org/Consortium/Patent-Policy#sec-Requirements">section
         5</a> (bullet 10) and <a href="http://www.w3.org/Consortium/Patent-Policy#sec-PAG-conclude">section
         7.5</a>. <span class="changed">A Working Group </span><span class="changed"><em
-          class="rfc2119">may</em> request the director to rescind a
+          class="rfc2119">may</em> request the Director to rescind a
         Recommendation which was a deliverable, or the Director </span><span class="changed"><em
           class="rfc2119">may</em> directly propose to rescind a Recommendation.
       </span><span class="from">(was "the Director calls for review when
@@ -797,7 +797,7 @@
     </ol>
     <p>If there was any <a href="http://www.w3.org/2005/10/Process-20051014/policies.html#def-Dissent"
         rel="glossary" title="Definition of Dissent"><span class="dfn-instance">dissent</span></a>
-      in Advisory Committee reviews, the director <span class="new"><em class="rfc2119">must</em>
+      in Advisory Committee reviews, the Director <span class="new"><em class="rfc2119">must</em>
         publish the substantive content of the dissent to W3C <strong>and the
           public</strong></span>, and <em class="rfc2119">must</em> <a href="http://www.w3.org/2005/10/Process-20051014/policies.html#formal-address">formally
         address</a> the comment <span class="new">at least 14 days before