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which provenance of provenance can be expressed.</p>
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-In applications where provenance is created by multiple parties over time, it is useful for provenance descriptions created by one party to link to provenance descriptions created by another party. To address this issue, this document introduces a relation allowing an entity description to be linked to another entity description occurring in another bundle.
+In applications where provenance is created by multiple parties over time, it is useful for provenance descriptions created by one party to link to provenance descriptions created by another party. To address this requirement, this document introduces a relation allowing an entity description to be linked to another entity description occurring in another bundle.
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<p>The <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/2012/WD-prov-overview-20121211/">PROV Document Overview</a> describes the overall state of PROV, and should be read before other PROV documents.</p>
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represented in various representations, and interchanged between systems across the Web.
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-<p>The provenance of information is crucial in deciding whether information is to be trusted, how it should be integrated with other diverse information sources, and how to give credit to its originators when reusing it. To support this, provenance should be trusted, and therefore, provenance of provenance is itself a critical aspect of an information infrastructure such as the Web. To this end, PROV introduces the concept of <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/2012/CR-prov-dm-20121211/#concept-bundle">Bundle</a>: defined as a set of provenance descriptions, it is a mechanism by which provenance of provenance can be expressed (see also <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/2012/CR-prov-o-20121211/#Bundle">Bundle</a> [[!PROV-O]] and <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/2012/WD-prov-xml-20121211/#term-Bundle">Bundle</a> [[PROV-XML]]). With bundles, blobs of provenance descriptions can be given names and can itself be regarded as entities, whose provenance can be described using PROV. </p>
+<p>The provenance of information is crucial in deciding whether information is to be trusted, how it should be integrated with other diverse information sources, and how to give credit to its originators when reusing it. To support this, provenance should be trusted, and therefore, provenance of provenance is itself a critical aspect of an information infrastructure such as the Web. To this end, PROV introduces the concept of <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/2012/CR-prov-dm-20121211/#concept-bundle">Bundle</a>: defined as a set of provenance descriptions, it is a mechanism by which provenance of provenance can be expressed (see also <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/2012/CR-prov-o-20121211/#Bundle">Bundle</a> [[!PROV-O]] and <a href="http://www.w3.org/TR/2012/WD-prov-xml-20121211/#term-Bundle">Bundle</a> [[PROV-XML]]). With bundles, blobs of provenance descriptions can be given names and can themselves be regarded as entities, whose provenance can in turn be described using PROV. </p>
<p>In a distributed environment, it is common to encounter applications that involve multiple parties: it is a common situation that some party creates some data and its provenance, whereas another party consumes the data and its provenance. In such a situation, the consumer, when it in turn generates provenance, often wants to augment the descriptions of entities generated by another producer. For the consumer, it is not suitable to repeat the provenance created by the producer, and augment it according to their need. Instead, a consumer wants to <em>refer</em> to the description as created by the producer <em>in situ</em>, i.e. in its bundle, and <em>specialize it</em>, allowing the consumer to add their own view on this entity.</p>
-<p>This document introduces a new concept <a>Mention</a> allowing an entity to be described as the specialization of another entity, itself described in another bundle. The document provides a conceptual definition <a>Mention</a>, but also the corresponding ontological, schema, and notational definitions, for the various representations of PROV. It also includes constraints that apply to this construct specifically. By defining <a>Mention</a> conceptually, and in the PROV representations will promote inter-operability.</p>
+<p>This document introduces a new concept <a>Mention</a> allowing an entity to be described as the specialization of another entity, itself described in another bundle. The document provides not only a conceptual definition of <a>Mention</a>, but also the corresponding ontological, schema, and notational definitions, for the various representations of PROV. It also includes constraints that apply to this construct specifically. It is our aim to promote inter-operability by defining <a>Mention</a> conceptually and in the representations of PROV.</p>
-<div class="note">The concept <a>Mention</a> is experimental, and for this reason was defined as part of the PROV recommendation-track documents. The Provenance Working Group is seeking feedback from the community on its usefulness in practical scenarios.
+<div class="note">The concept <a>Mention</a> is experimental, and for this reason was not defined in PROV recommendation-track documents. The Provenance Working Group is seeking feedback from the community on its usefulness in practical scenarios.
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