--- a/people/index.html	Sun Jan 29 20:12:13 2012 +0000
+++ b/people/index.html	Sun Jan 29 20:38:34 2012 +0000
@@ -21,14 +21,14 @@
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 <section id="sotd">
-  <p>This document is work in progress. You might also want to check the accompanying <a href="http://www.w3.org/2011/gld/wiki/">Wiki</a> of the GLD Working Group for ongoing discussions.</p>
+  <p>This document is work in progress. You might also want to check the accompanying <a href="http://www.w3.org/2011/gld/wiki/Terms_for_describing_people">Wiki page</a> of the GLD Working Group for ongoing discussions.</p>
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 <section class="introductory">
 <h2>Scope</h2>
 <p>
-This document is aimed at people who are familiar with RDF schemata. We assume that the reader wants to represent some source data in RDF and hence is looking for an interoperable way to describe people and their relationships to other entities such as organisations, projects, etc.
+This document is aimed at both publishers and consumers of Linked Data. We assume that the reader has a certain familiarity with RDF and RDF Schema as well as well-known vocabularies, such as FOAF or Dublin Core. The goal of the document is to specify an interoperable way to describe people and their relationships to other entities such as organisations or projects.
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 </section>
 
@@ -36,7 +36,7 @@
 <h2 id="intro">Introduction</h2>
 <section>
 <h3>Walkthrough example</h3>
-<p>In many cases, <dfn title="Data from datastores such as RDBs or spreadsheets that acts as a source for the Linked Data publishing process.">source data</dfn> contains data about people. We will use the following plain text example throughout the document to demonstrate the usage of terms:</p>
+<p>In many cases, <dfn title="Data from datastores such as RDBs or spreadsheets that acts as a source for the Linked Data publishing process.">source data</dfn> contains data about people and other, related entities. We will use the following text as an example throughout the document to demonstrate the usage of terms:</p>
 <pre class='example sh_html'>
  Jane Doe is CEO of ColCids Inc., headquartered in 2242 Old Middlefield Way, Mountain View, CA, United States.
  Recently, ColCids won a contract for providing an Open Data platform, awarded by the Santa Clara County. The
@@ -200,10 +200,7 @@
 
  &lt;http://colcids.com/person/42&gt; a sioc:User .
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 <section class="appendix">
 <h2>Acknowledgments</h2>
 <p>
-The Editor would like to thank the following people for their input and directions: Phil, Renato, George, Sandro, Richard, etc.
+The Editor would like to thank the following people for their input and directions: Phil, Renato, George, Sandro, Richard.
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