--- a/longdesc1/longdesc.html	Mon Jan 06 13:16:56 2014 -0500
+++ b/longdesc1/longdesc.html	Mon Jan 06 14:33:22 2014 -0500
@@ -506,8 +506,8 @@
           titles, and some titles are not well known. When the image itself
           cannot be seen, a description can often be used to offer easier
           recognition than the cataloging information, for example "Washington
-          crossing some river, standing heroically in a boat, while soldiers
-          do the hard work", or "the Da Vinci picture of the guy in a square and
+          crossing a river, standing heroically in a boat, while soldiers
+          do all the paddling", or "the Da Vinci picture of the man in a square and
           a circle".</dd>
         <dd><em>Requires</em>: <a href="#discoverability">Discoverability</a></dd>
         <dd><em>Helped by</em>: <a href="#inline">Inline</a>,